منتديات ليلاس

Hi, I have tried to translate one of my short storied. I'm not sure if it is still good after transelation. I will wait for your openion.

The Sea

Since she was young, she is sunken to ear in the sea of sadness. She has grown up, and the sea grows with her, covers her. the sea was so black, her white clothes stained by the color of the sea. Now it is as black as the sea. She have surrendered to the waves, it takes her wherever it wants..till..till she saw him.. he was wearing white clothes and play on flute heavenly music. People around him was dancing and cheering.. and he saw her .. he left all people and ran to her .. he said: give me your hand, I will pull you away. She replied: leave me. I have lived here allover my life. If I left this sea I may die. Please go away before you get the same destiny. He smiled, laughed at her words and gave her his hand. She hesitated for a long time then finally she gave him her hand. In this moment the sea raged, waves became higher and higher then snatched her out of his hands and thrown her away. He looked at her while the waives were taking her away oh him. He looked at his own clothes, it has been stained by the water of the sea. The white color turned into dark black. Some of the sea water sneaked into his heart. He took his flute and walked between cities, Playing sad music and calling her name .. searching for her … people was laughing at him and saying: crazy … oh, he is crazy.. an old man with a white beard replied them: no, he is a lover ..an adorer …
crazy …crazy .. he is crazy ….. no adorer…. Adorer… he is adorer
the adorer boy sat on the sea beach and cried … cried … cried. His tears streamed to the sea. The tears made a white bath through the sea water.
She cried, cried, cried … since they have been separated she has never stopped crying .. her tears has built a white bath for her through the water of the sea. Tears has been increased … her tears and his …the two baths joined together .. her bath and his .. she walked on her bath and her walked in his until they met each others .. he holds her hand to congratulate her on the meeting .. the sea raged .. tried to separate them again .. but they stacked to each other tightly .. suddenly a white cloud rushed from the sky, surrounded them, then flied with them .. up .. up .. up to the sky.
People looked at them .. one of them said: what is that?? Are they .. are they died?? The old man with the white bird replied them: no, they lived .. lived up there .. and he pointed up to sky. .

On this moment the sea disappeared.