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Fourth poem wear the mask بقلم لوحة فنانة منسية

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته

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القصيدة الرابعة وهي

Wear The mask

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وسوف يكون تقييمكم على جمالية القصيدة من اسلوبها ولغتها

ويكون من 10 درجات

وشكراااا

مبرووووووووووووك بداية المسابقة
بالتوفيق لجميع المشتركين

woooooooooow
really beautiful
my evaluation
10

I read all the poems
I do not have enough experience to give the evaluation
So I do not want to be unfair to the participants
I will give my assessment to the poem that I found it best

Wear The mask
10
Point:)

A perfect and wonderful poem
I enjoyed reading it :)

Thank you so much LOoOLyyyyyy for all the efforts that you have done

ALLAH bless you all

very nice poem . some words maybe error in writting it e.g.
With all day till instead of tell darkness rise and
I shall give you invitation instesd of invite
my rate is 8/10

Great poem .. Thank you

10

good luck everybody

^_^

salam 3laekm

Great poem
And choice of words is very beautiful

i give it 8

thankssssss

nice one really
10/10

بداية مووفقة
بالتوفيق للجميع :)

Thank you
it is very good poem

Evaluation
9.5 / 10

salam 3laekm

good luck everybody

i give it ...10

Thank you

بالتوفيق لــــ الجميع المشاركين

السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته

Great poem
Writer knew how to display the beauty of the idea
I give it 9
Best wishes

Its an Excellent poem, good subject and well writing

Evaluation: 9.5/10

good luck for all

Excellent ..

in choosing subject and manipulating words and every thing

very good in language an expression

i like it

good luck ...

Hello
this is a great poem
really great
the subject is very smart
the language is not bad the whole poem is one amazing visualization
and I adored the rhythm
but there were some errors
like in the title
when you start a sentence with a verb ,then it is an order.
you are ordering us to wear the mask
so, I think it should be I wear the mask or the mask I wear
then I was really surprised by the word Nay
I mean it's such an old word that I've only read in historical novels and I thought it was the street way of no but it turned out that it is magnification of a simple no and it was used in the old English by the likes of Shakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe and those really old writers
so I guess you read a lot of old stuff
there were some grammar and language errors
I wear the mask that grin and lie , but it should be (that grins and lies)
It hide my cheek , should be (hides)
that dept me push , should be that dept I push)
and I don't understand the push thing
I think you mean pay
when you said I sense it should be
(I feel)
like been captor
it should be (like I have been a captor)
all day tell the darkness , should be (all day till the darkness)
give you invite , should be (give you invitation)

you said in closure
and it should be in the end
closure may have the same meaning but it has different uses
and basically it means emotional end
but it still is a wonderful poem I just think it needs a little bit of refining
I wish you all the luck in the competition

hello

the poem is very good
I liked it

your choosing for the title and the subject was good
your expression also was good
but I hope in the next time to replace some words in other words to become appropriate for the meaning

good luck ^^

Hello

A very beautiful poem

Style of language is beautiful and harmonious

This strange and beautiful

Success of the rider always