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The third poem the night of love بقلم special lady

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته

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والقصيدة الثالثة هي

The Night of LOVE

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وسوف يكون تقييمكم على جمالية القصيدة من اسلوبها ولغتها

ويكون من 10 درجات

وشكراااا

مبرووووووووووك بداية المسابقة
وبالتوفيق لجميع المشتركين

beautiful
ny evaluation is 7
it has alot of grammer errors

Dear , you have a lot of english errors you should have taken care of ... material of the poem fair ... my rate is 5/10

good luck everybody

^_^

salam 3laekm

A good poem
simplicity and spontaneity

Repetition bothers me

i give it 6

Good luck

the moment he confess
6/10

بدااية موفقة
بالتوفيق للجميع ^^

A beautiful poem but you need to check more

8

good luck

good effort
Romantic and spontaneous poem

Evaluation
8 / 10

salam 3laekm

good luck everybody

i give it ....7

Thank you

so raomantic but it suffers from many grammer errors ...take care next time

10>>7

good luck

بالتوفيق لـــ الجميع المشاركين في المسابقه

السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته

a Sensitive poem
Words are very romantic
Light and sweet
Give it 8
Best wishes

there are a lot of grammatical mistakes

generally, it's acceptable

Evaluation: 6/10

good luck for all

the poetry is very good

but you didn't give alot of poetry devices

the title is very good the idea and language very good

good luck in compatition

hello
in the begining I'd like to say I really enjoyed the poem
the language was basically good the meaning and the visualization were great but the grammer is very very weak
begining with the title
it should have been (A night of love) instead of the night of love
because you are talking about a single night not the night in general
then you said the night I will kept
it should be (Iwill keep)
the moment he confession
should be (the moment he confessed)
His heart control his mind should be (controlled)
I throw myself should be (I threw)
mad of him should be (mad at him)
he whisper should be (whispered)
the last
you said I am the most happiness
it should be (I am the happiest)
the grammer is really important speciaally if you are describing something in the past and all those errors will just be a distraction to the reader and it won't make us enjoy the poem and it was a very nice poem that deserved to be enjoyed
in general I really liked your words
I wish you all the luck in the competition

the poem is good
the title is good but not excellent
the subject also is good
your language is not bad
but your expressions is prosaic
and your use for the poetical devices is not good

the poem is acceptable but not attractive to the reader
but I really enjoyed it
good luck ^^

Hello

A very beautiful poem

Style of language is beautiful and harmonious

This strange and beautiful

Success of the rider always