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very goood poem
i think you can improve it alot i hope in future you extend your poem more but it's very good >> the title , the idea , the expressions good luck in compatition |
good evening this poem is great I really loved it I mean the subject is just sooo dear to my heart and I loved that you put some rhythm the language was very good and there were some beautiful visualizations but there were also some grammer errors the colors are brighter and the air softer should be (Is softer) if carry it with you ,you never become older should be ( if you carry it with you, you will never become older) It's short season should be it's (a short season) but in whole ,I loved it ,specially the revealing of the mystery in the end I wish you all the luck in the competition |
hello
the poem is very nice I like the title and the subject your expressions are good your language also is good but be careful for your grammar good luck ^^ |
Hello
A very beautiful poem Style of language is beautiful and harmonious This strange and beautiful Success of the rider always |
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