Fourth poem wear the mask بقلم لوحة فنانة منسية
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
http://www.liilas.com/up/uploads/liilas_13398694591.gif القصيدة الرابعة وهي Wear The mask http://www.liilas.com/up/uploads/liilas_13398689854.jpg وسوف يكون تقييمكم على جمالية القصيدة من اسلوبها ولغتها ويكون من 10 درجات وشكراااا |
مبرووووووووووووك بداية المسابقة
بالتوفيق لجميع المشتركين |
woooooooooow
really beautiful my evaluation 10 |
I read all the poems I do not have enough experience to give the evaluation So I do not want to be unfair to the participants I will give my assessment to the poem that I found it best Wear The mask 10 Point:) A perfect and wonderful poem I enjoyed reading it :) Thank you so much LOoOLyyyyyy for all the efforts that you have done ALLAH bless you all |
very nice poem . some words maybe error in writting it e.g.
With all day till instead of tell darkness rise and I shall give you invitation instesd of invite my rate is 8/10 |
Great poem .. Thank you
10 |
good luck everybody
^_^ |
salam 3laekm
Great poem And choice of words is very beautiful i give it 8 thankssssss |
nice one really
10/10 |
بداية مووفقة
بالتوفيق للجميع :) |
Thank you it is very good poem Evaluation 9.5 / 10 |
salam 3laekm
good luck everybody i give it ...10 Thank you |
بالتوفيق لــــ الجميع المشاركين |
السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته
Great poem Writer knew how to display the beauty of the idea I give it 9 Best wishes |
Its an Excellent poem, good subject and well writing Evaluation: 9.5/10 good luck for all |
Excellent ..
in choosing subject and manipulating words and every thing very good in language an expression i like it good luck ... |
Hello this is a great poem really great the subject is very smart the language is not bad the whole poem is one amazing visualization and I adored the rhythm but there were some errors like in the title when you start a sentence with a verb ,then it is an order. you are ordering us to wear the mask so, I think it should be I wear the mask or the mask I wear then I was really surprised by the word Nay I mean it's such an old word that I've only read in historical novels and I thought it was the street way of no but it turned out that it is magnification of a simple no and it was used in the old English by the likes of Shakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe and those really old writers so I guess you read a lot of old stuff there were some grammar and language errors I wear the mask that grin and lie , but it should be (that grins and lies) It hide my cheek , should be (hides) that dept me push , should be that dept I push) and I don't understand the push thing I think you mean pay when you said I sense it should be (I feel) like been captor it should be (like I have been a captor) all day tell the darkness , should be (all day till the darkness) give you invite , should be (give you invitation) you said in closure and it should be in the end closure may have the same meaning but it has different uses and basically it means emotional end but it still is a wonderful poem I just think it needs a little bit of refining I wish you all the luck in the competition |
hello
the poem is very good I liked it your choosing for the title and the subject was good your expression also was good but I hope in the next time to replace some words in other words to become appropriate for the meaning good luck ^^ |
Hello
A very beautiful poem Style of language is beautiful and harmonious This strange and beautiful Success of the rider always |
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